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Appendix A: Concepts and Strategies for Revision 465 1 4a 4b Combine 2 and 5a Combine 3 and 6 5b Write new paragraph on other solutions 7 You might note that this strategy can also be applied on the sentence and section level. Additionally, if you are a kinesthetic or visual learner, you might cut your paper into smaller pieces that you can physically manipulate. Be sure to read aloud after reverse outlining to look for abrupt transitions. You can see a simplified version of this technique demonstrated in this video. Local Revision Activity: Cutting Fluff When it’s late at night, the deadline is approaching, and we’ve simply run out of things to say… we turn to fluff. Fluff refers to language which doesn’t do work for you—language that simply takes up space or sits flat on the page, rather than working economically and impactfully. Whether or not you’ve used it deliberately, all authors have been guilty of fluffy writing at one time or another. Example of fluff on social media [“Presidents don’t have to be smart” from funnyjunk.com]. Fluff happens for a lot of reasons. • Of course, reaching a word- or page-count is the most common motivation. • Introductions and conclusions are often fluffy because the author can’t find a way into or out of the subject, or because the author doesn’t know what their exact subject will be. • Sometimes, the presence of fluff is an indication that the author doesn’t know enough about the subject or that their scope is too broad. • Other times, fluffy language is deployed in an effort to sound “smarter” or “fancier” or “more academic”—which is an understandable pitfall for developing writers. These circumstances, plus others, encourage us to use language that’s not as effective, authentic, or economical. Fluff happens in a lot of ways; here are a few I’ve noticed: